Use this template to guide your review of your partner’s essay. Answer all questions here, and feel free to add additional notes outside of the categories below.

REMEMBER: Be respectful of the work your partner has put in. Treat your partner as you like to be treated. 

Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.] 

 YEs I believe the task follows the orientation because it follows all major instructions. This includes font size, spacing, and structure. 

Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it. 

The thesis is: Although cloning medicine has proven to have clinical purpose, due to ethical issues that are tied to it, there are no possibilities yet for widespread adoption. 

Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentence sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively? 

I believe that there are several topic sentences that effectively provide an effective introduction to paragraphs but there are also some areas that could have improvement.  

Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence? 

I believe that there is a lot of paraphrasing used when making statements which helps introduce and understand the evidence being used. However, if i were to recommend something it would be to add direct quotes because it adds more credibility, 

Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother. 

I think the paper has a steady flow and does not have any areas where it loses the reader. However, if i were to make a suggestion it would be to add titles to sections just to add more organization to the structure. 

Write what you consider: 

• the clearest sentence: “Nonetheless, scientific innovation alone is unlikely to resolve the ethical dilemmas surrounding therapeutic cloning.” 

• the most confusing sentence: “Traditional organoid models suffer from poor oxygen and nutrient diffusion, leading to tissue degradation at their core.”

Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling:

In the actual paper itself I have made suggestions on grammatical issues, structural issues. However to recap them I suggested several structural components that would add organization to his essay. 

What single change would make the most improvement in this essay? 

I believe the single best improvement to this essay if i were to recommend one thing would be, to add direct quotes from the readings because it will not only add credibility to your statements but also adds a direct perspective from the author.